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Feel free to make any spelling corrections necessary.  Grammar, I'm a little more cautious about (since it may be wrong on purpose and grammar can be more subjective).  If you think any grammar changes are needed, please post them here. [[User:Archabaddon|- Obsidius]] 20:35, 19 November 2009 (UTC)
 
Feel free to make any spelling corrections necessary.  Grammar, I'm a little more cautious about (since it may be wrong on purpose and grammar can be more subjective).  If you think any grammar changes are needed, please post them here. [[User:Archabaddon|- Obsidius]] 20:35, 19 November 2009 (UTC)
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:Data analysis is making me sleepy today.  Proofreading might help me stay awake.  :)
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::''The also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency''
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::''concentrating on vigilence against Nictus''
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::''the eldest would willing become''
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::''bot in the fields of science and warfare''
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::''both in the fields of science and warfare''
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::''William passed Aleastor on to his son''
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::''William passed Alaestor on to his son''
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::''themselves and their Nictus supports how had been hiding''
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::''themselves and their Nictus supporters who had been hiding''
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::''Alaestor had originally travel to Earth''
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:Back to checking numbers. :) --[[User:Eabrace|Eabrace]] [[File:Healthbar notify phone.png|20px|link=User talk:Eabrace]] 21:01, 19 November 2009 (UTC)

Latest revision as of 21:01, 19 November 2009

Spelling & Grammar

Feel free to make any spelling corrections necessary. Grammar, I'm a little more cautious about (since it may be wrong on purpose and grammar can be more subjective). If you think any grammar changes are needed, please post them here. - Obsidius 20:35, 19 November 2009 (UTC)

Data analysis is making me sleepy today. Proofreading might help me stay awake.  :)
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The also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency
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They also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency


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concentrating on vigilence against Nictus
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concentrating on vigilance against Nictus


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the eldest would willing become
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the eldest would willingly become


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bot in the fields of science and warfare
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both in the fields of science and warfare


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William passed Aleastor on to his son
Suggested:
William passed Alaestor on to his son


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themselves and their Nictus supports how had been hiding
Suggested:
themselves and their Nictus supporters who had been hiding


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Alaestor had originally travel to Earth
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Alaestor had originally traveled to Earth


Back to checking numbers. :) --Eabrace Healthbar notify phone.png 21:01, 19 November 2009 (UTC)
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