Talk:Alaestor (Triumph)
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Feel free to make any spelling corrections necessary. Grammar, I'm a little more cautious about (since it may be wrong on purpose and grammar can be more subjective). If you think any grammar changes are needed, please post them here. - Obsidius 20:35, 19 November 2009 (UTC)
- Data analysis is making me sleepy today. Proofreading might help me stay awake. :)
- Current:
- The also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency
- Suggested:
- They also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency
- Current:
- concentrating on vigilence against Nictus
- Suggested:
- concentrating on vigilance against Nictus
- Current:
- the eldest would willing become
- Suggested:
- the eldest would willingly become
- Current:
- bot in the fields of science and warfare
- Suggested:
- both in the fields of science and warfare
- Current:
- William passed Aleastor on to his son
- Suggested:
- William passed Alaestor on to his son
- Current:
- themselves and their Nictus supports how had been hiding
- Suggested:
- themselves and their Nictus supporters who had been hiding
- Current:
- Alaestor had originally travel to Earth
- Suggested:
- Alaestor had originally traveled to Earth
- Back to checking numbers. :) --Eabrace 21:01, 19 November 2009 (UTC)