Talk:Alaestor (Triumph)

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Feel free to make any spelling corrections necessary. Grammar, I'm a little more cautious about (since it may be wrong on purpose and grammar can be more subjective). If you think any grammar changes are needed, please post them here. - Obsidius 20:35, 19 November 2009 (UTC)

Data analysis is making me sleepy today. Proofreading might help me stay awake.  :)
Current:
The also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency
Suggested:
They also prepared in secret to defend the island against any Nictus insurgency


Current:
concentrating on vigilence against Nictus
Suggested:
concentrating on vigilance against Nictus


Current:
the eldest would willing become
Suggested:
the eldest would willingly become


Current:
bot in the fields of science and warfare
Suggested:
both in the fields of science and warfare


Current:
William passed Aleastor on to his son
Suggested:
William passed Alaestor on to his son


Current:
themselves and their Nictus supports how had been hiding
Suggested:
themselves and their Nictus supporters who had been hiding


Current:
Alaestor had originally travel to Earth
Suggested:
Alaestor had originally traveled to Earth


Back to checking numbers. :) --Eabrace Healthbar notify phone.png 21:01, 19 November 2009 (UTC)